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[T] Journey To The Turnabout ○
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TKinhonipei
Joined: Wed Dec 22, 2010 1:16 am Posts: 2719
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This case is still in development. Feel free to elaborate on its contents~!!Trial Series: Phoenix Wright: For The FutureCase 1: Journey To The Turnabout(Warning: There are JFA & T&T spoilers in this case.) Trial Part 1: http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php?id_proces=21880Trial Part 2: http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php?id_proces=22780Trial Part 3: ~In Development~This time he faces a familiar enemy who once had him on edge. One who's identity remains hidden throughout the trial until the very end. That enemy is known to have put Phoenix in a very remembered crisis, one that he wishes not to occur yet again. Phoenix Wright tries his best to reveal the crime's true plot, and the murderer's true identity. The truth of the crime Phoenix Wright has to solve is quite impossible to believe... But as they say... Nothing is impossible.
_________________Gumpei is so awesome for being everything that I've always wished for. <3 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ Holhol is my soulmate ~<3
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ BBblader© wrote: The strongest bonds you can make are the ones you aren't looking for, the ones that surprise you. I'm speaking from experience, so I believe in that pretty strongly. Think that's why so many relationships fail, because people wind up forcing themselves to find good in the other person, play up who they are to appear more attractive to them... but well... real love is being yourself, with someone who cares about you and accepts you for who you are.
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 12:25 am |
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Putin
Joined: Sat Aug 21, 2010 3:50 am Posts: 4226 Location: The Future
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Was kinda iffy on the prologue, but let me say that you did a very good characterization on the thief!
I'm really enjoying this so far (there are actually some bugs that needs pointed out...)
LOL @ Gumshoe pay joke.
So far, I'm at CE1, you've definitely shown you have a mastering of the basics of the editor so far TK!
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 12:57 am |
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E.D.Revolution
Joined: Mon Jul 26, 2010 9:00 pm Posts: 4999 Location: Across dimensions, transcending universes
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TKHawaiianAZN wrote: If I didn't obey a rule, please tell me! I hate being a rule breaker  (even though I never did break rules before) Sorry to say you already did. Mainly, what is this case about, or rather, what is this series about... But enough about that, let me welcome you to AAO. Here's my report on this case so far. It's not my usual bug report, but I see this case has a lot of potential. You're doing a lot of things right for this trial. Just check over your grammar and spelling. I look forward to part 2. Most of your characters are very in-character, but Gumshoe. For ron, though... Don't use black. Use grey to signify whispering. It's hard to read black on a grey background.
_________________My featured series: Mia Fey: Ace Spirit Attorney Credits to Tap for this awesome logo! Case: 1 FEATURED! ★ | 2-1 2-2 2-3 2-4 | 3 | 4 | 5 | On Hiatus, transferring to PyWright
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 1:03 am |
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Blackrune
Joined: Fri Apr 17, 2009 3:11 am Posts: 2922 Location: Right behind you
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A new trial... and I like what I see so far. Let's see Pros: -the basic structure of a trial is kept (gratz, not everyone gets it that right the first time already) -Nice dialogues, I must say (but that's what I almost always say. It just means that I like your writing style.^^) -Glove Prints  (don't ask why, but that's a huge pro for me) Con: -the minor issues I pointed out above -autopsy-time-contradictions are overused, but this one had a funny explanation so whatever. Conclusion: Approved. I want more. xD No really, the contradictions weren't that hard to spot but how you made Phoenix point them out felt quite AA-like. (the satisfaction from rubbing it into the witness' face) I also enjoyed that classic fingerprints-problem logic-battle. And Maggey's suggested explanation for the prints on the knife was epic. (I could literally picture that happen in my head... I don't know whether I should be happy about that. >_>)
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TKinhonipei
Joined: Wed Dec 22, 2010 1:16 am Posts: 2719
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Thanks guys! Your opinions and criticism really do help me out, I'll do my best to revise my trial part one, and then I'll get going on part two  And I'm glad to see that people actually love my work *tear* 
_________________Gumpei is so awesome for being everything that I've always wished for. <3 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ Holhol is my soulmate ~<3
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ BBblader© wrote: The strongest bonds you can make are the ones you aren't looking for, the ones that surprise you. I'm speaking from experience, so I believe in that pretty strongly. Think that's why so many relationships fail, because people wind up forcing themselves to find good in the other person, play up who they are to appear more attractive to them... but well... real love is being yourself, with someone who cares about you and accepts you for who you are.
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 1:31 am |
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Ryu Ushiromiya
Joined: Wed Jan 05, 2011 6:57 pm Posts: 2360 Location: Puerto Rico
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I really liked your trial, though the second CE was quite difficult to find. Nevertheless, this is excellent work indeed. 
_________________IMPORTANT MESSAGE! CLICK HERE PLEASE?Apologies if I do not reply in a timely manner. Sig by Tap!
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 2:24 am |
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TKinhonipei
Joined: Wed Dec 22, 2010 1:16 am Posts: 2719
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The intro has a new remodel now! 
_________________Gumpei is so awesome for being everything that I've always wished for. <3 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ Holhol is my soulmate ~<3
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ BBblader© wrote: The strongest bonds you can make are the ones you aren't looking for, the ones that surprise you. I'm speaking from experience, so I believe in that pretty strongly. Think that's why so many relationships fail, because people wind up forcing themselves to find good in the other person, play up who they are to appear more attractive to them... but well... real love is being yourself, with someone who cares about you and accepts you for who you are.
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E.D.Revolution
Joined: Mon Jul 26, 2010 9:00 pm Posts: 4999 Location: Across dimensions, transcending universes
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I know you're eager to show off your trial, but bumping the thread isn't the best idea. As a written rule, you're limited to one bump per 12 hours. As an unwritten rule, excessive bumping and advertising is heavily frowned upon... That said, I'm liking your fixes so far... You should feel very proud of yourself. In a recent string of very poorly written and rushed 1st trials, your trial is refreshing, like a spring breeze. Ahem... Again, I look forward to part 2. Keep doing what you know how to do.
_________________My featured series: Mia Fey: Ace Spirit Attorney Credits to Tap for this awesome logo! Case: 1 FEATURED! ★ | 2-1 2-2 2-3 2-4 | 3 | 4 | 5 | On Hiatus, transferring to PyWright
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 6:05 am |
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TKinhonipei
Joined: Wed Dec 22, 2010 1:16 am Posts: 2719
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Sorry! Didn't know that. I'll keep that in mind.
_________________Gumpei is so awesome for being everything that I've always wished for. <3 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ Holhol is my soulmate ~<3
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ BBblader© wrote: The strongest bonds you can make are the ones you aren't looking for, the ones that surprise you. I'm speaking from experience, so I believe in that pretty strongly. Think that's why so many relationships fail, because people wind up forcing themselves to find good in the other person, play up who they are to appear more attractive to them... but well... real love is being yourself, with someone who cares about you and accepts you for who you are.
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 6:09 am |
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Putin
Joined: Sat Aug 21, 2010 3:50 am Posts: 4226 Location: The Future
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I CAN HEAR EVERYTHING YOU SAY!!!! Haha, I like the parody of the monologue(don't quote me on that though), and it fit really well with the character =] I'll actually finish this if I have time tomorrow, but from what I saw (still at CE1), you deserve a pat on the back  , this is a very enjoyable 1st time trial that I've seen in awhile. When did you start working on this btw?
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| Fri Jan 21, 2011 6:30 am |
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TKinhonipei
Joined: Wed Dec 22, 2010 1:16 am Posts: 2719
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Huddini wrote: I CAN HEAR EVERYTHING YOU SAY!!!! Haha, I like the parody of the monologue(don't quote me on that though), and it fit really well with the character =] I'll actually finish this if I have time tomorrow, but from what I saw (still at CE1), you deserve a pat on the back  , this is a very enjoyable 1st time trial that I've seen in awhile. When did you start working on this btw? Thanks Huddini!  I started working on this like three weeks ago. It was an idea that just kept prodding my head, I just had to make this case, you know? ^.^ Ideas would always keep coming into my head, but what strives me to keep going on with my series is the crime. And what do I mean by that? That answer will come someday... XD
_________________Gumpei is so awesome for being everything that I've always wished for. <3 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ Holhol is my soulmate ~<3
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ BBblader© wrote: The strongest bonds you can make are the ones you aren't looking for, the ones that surprise you. I'm speaking from experience, so I believe in that pretty strongly. Think that's why so many relationships fail, because people wind up forcing themselves to find good in the other person, play up who they are to appear more attractive to them... but well... real love is being yourself, with someone who cares about you and accepts you for who you are.
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| Tue Jan 25, 2011 8:44 am |
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TKinhonipei
Joined: Wed Dec 22, 2010 1:16 am Posts: 2719
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Things seemed good, and now I present to you guys, Journey To The Turnabout Part 2! Enjoy. 
_________________Gumpei is so awesome for being everything that I've always wished for. <3 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ Holhol is my soulmate ~<3
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ BBblader© wrote: The strongest bonds you can make are the ones you aren't looking for, the ones that surprise you. I'm speaking from experience, so I believe in that pretty strongly. Think that's why so many relationships fail, because people wind up forcing themselves to find good in the other person, play up who they are to appear more attractive to them... but well... real love is being yourself, with someone who cares about you and accepts you for who you are.
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Blackrune
Joined: Fri Apr 17, 2009 3:11 am Posts: 2922 Location: Right behind you
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Well that took longer than you said it would.I approve of this. Well you already know my opinion so there's not really something left for me to say. But maaan, that unnecessarily detailed testimony was a pain. 
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| Sun Feb 27, 2011 1:53 pm |
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TKinhonipei
Joined: Wed Dec 22, 2010 1:16 am Posts: 2719
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Blackrune wrote: Well that took longer than you said it would.I approve of this. Well you already know my opinion so there's not really something left for me to say. But maaan, that unnecessarily detailed testimony was a pain.  Hehe, very sorry. I kept checking in with the second beta-tester, trying to wait for results. Just a fact, I wasn't really impatient. I was just worried that they decided not to beta-test. For a week, they wouldn't reply at all. So I just got a new person about two days ago, did it in one day, said it was splendid. So with that beta-tester, and you Blackrune, it is now completed. Thanks. 
_________________Gumpei is so awesome for being everything that I've always wished for. <3 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ Holhol is my soulmate ~<3
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ஜ۩۞۩ஜ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬ BBblader© wrote: The strongest bonds you can make are the ones you aren't looking for, the ones that surprise you. I'm speaking from experience, so I believe in that pretty strongly. Think that's why so many relationships fail, because people wind up forcing themselves to find good in the other person, play up who they are to appear more attractive to them... but well... real love is being yourself, with someone who cares about you and accepts you for who you are.
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Ryu Ushiromiya
Joined: Wed Jan 05, 2011 6:57 pm Posts: 2360 Location: Puerto Rico
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Hey man. Sorry I haven't been able to test your trial. I was dealing with real-life problems, so I owe you an apology for not being able to keep my promise. I know it's not much at this point, but I'll play your part right now and PM you the results.
Once again, I am truly sorry.
_________________IMPORTANT MESSAGE! CLICK HERE PLEASE?Apologies if I do not reply in a timely manner. Sig by Tap!
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| Mon Feb 28, 2011 5:44 am |
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