I'm going to be nitpicky. Because yaaaaaay =D
It should just be "Blissful Bluff", not "On the Blissful Bluff"
I would say scrap the timestamp at the beginning, and make this intro auto-advance with wait timers. (...But add some "Loaded. Click below to play!" frame at the beginning. Because it's annoying if it starts out auto-advancing, since you tab out to wait for the trial to load, and you tab in to find out you missed the intro)
lolwut is this song xD
zomg not the Crone! D:
You don't need to tell us when you add the attorney's badge to the CR
It's 'just there'
lol, there's lots of garish stuff here, Polly
That office scene was completely unnecessary. I'd cut it.
You don't need the "Played by" at the end of the profiles xD You could also make the profiles a bit shorter. For instance, Amanda's could be "My client. Sings and plays guitar in a duo with her sister." ...Oh, and it's also nice to have everyone's age :3
Thoughts should still have the dialogue blips
Wait why is there a check on the attorney's badge? XD
Should be vocal cHords.
You don't need to say that his profile was added; just give it to us
You don't have to give EVERY evidence a check; the regular description of the knife and badge are enough
Franzy should probably capitalize a bit more on the fact that the knife has Amanda's fingerprints ^^'
For some reason the injury report was added a frame after the "Injury Report added to Court Record" frame o.O
The wait timer for Franzy's curtsey should be a bit longer
Franzy should ask Tilly to state her name and occupation before anything else
You don't really need that music between the testimony and the cross-examination
The music starts a frame too early on the cross-examination
You don't need that long description of the photo in its regular description; you can put it in the check
zomg you can't add the photo to the court record twice. *thumbs up*
In that contradictory statement, maybe in the press convo, maybe make it a bit more clear that Tilly means that there were only the two of them
woooooooooow that's a lot of different talk conversations
zomg I did all the talk convos and examined the gloves, why can't I go on? ;_;
oh noez fattycakes can be added to the court record twice. same for the gloves
oh I had to get that book
There should be a timestamp when you arrive at Polly's office
That scene with Lynn was short and... kinda meh. We could've just met her in court in the lobby
I would make the nametage "Lynn & Amanda" or something instead of "Harmony"
nuuu I don't want to cross-examine her, let's just accept the testimony <3
at the beginning of the cross-examination there's an extraneous "- - -What I saw: my side- - -" frame
For some reason, the press convo for 'I watched her from a large set of bushes nearby... the two of them were to my right.' leads back to that statement rather than the next one o.O
Pressing "She ran in very suddenly, shouting something about "The Crone..."" redirects to the statement before it...
A lot of these presses don't redirect to the following statement >_> I think you'd better double check and fix them
When Polly asked about the gloves, he presented them when I hit "Yes"... I didn't actually have to present them ^^' Also there should be some sort of convo about them, and then something like Franzy asking Polly if he can actually show they were there before having Polly present them
We didn't really need that scene with Clarine ^^' In fact, you didn't really need that 3rd day of trial. You could've just had that defendant lobby happen while Franzy got Clarine to come to court
The lifebar doesn't stop flashing when you present the Ritual Book. Also, the autopsy report should also work as a proper present there (I mean, it's also about the wound)
Well she gave up quickly. Well, it was nice that she didn't try to blame Clair
I gave Franzy the knife so she could stab me. Why didn't she like it? D:
Anyway, it was 3 days of trial, but it felt really short. It was pretty basic, but it was well put-together. I'm sure you can put together some pretty good trials in the future
