Parts Day 1 ~ Investigation Day 2 ~ Trial Former Day 2 ~ Trial Latter Day 2 ~ Investigation Day 3 ~ Trial Former Day 3 ~ Trial Latter Day 3 ~ Investigation Day 3 ~ Investigation Part 2 Day 4 ~ Trial Former Day 4 ~ Trial Latter
This was the competition entry for What Crime Is It?, submitted by E.D.Revolution and myself. Our crime is smuggling, and it sorta ties with Ace Attorney Investigations: Miles Edgeworth (yes, it's the same smuggling ring). However, the main character is not Miles Edgeworth (more on that later).
Now, a brief synopsis: Your client is a man who was actually once involved with the smuggling ring! *LE GASP* He's charged with smuggling fake money out of Zheng Fa and a statue out of Borginia.
Now, who the flip are you, anyways? You're Mia Fey (quite appropriate for two Mia Fey writers ). Your co-council is Ema Skye, and your rival.... Is Shi-Long Lang. Yes, the Interpol Agent takes the place of prosecutor.
There will be ten parts to this case, out of the pure fact this is based after Turnabout Dream.
Reviews Keep in mind, these reviews can have spoilers in them. It's best to play the case before reading them.
Spoiler : Gumpei :
Before I get into the good bits, I would like to get my two major complaints out of the way: One, there are several words and phrases that are repeated way too much, often in the same frames. (In particular, I noticed attest, then, Well..., Hmm..., Anyways, huh, a lot, at all, speaking of which, better, here, and alright) It's not always a bad thing, but if it's to the point where it's that noticeable it needs to be modified a bit. Second thing is the text speed. The text speed is incredibly fluctuating in the investigation. It goes from slow to fast quickly, and it makes the flow of the trial in certain areas awkward. The only other real complaints I would have are that the females had male voices and the males had female voices a few times, some frames are missing names, a few lines run-on for too unnecessarily long, some of the references felt forced, and several of the characters seem strangely snappy at times.
Those things out of the way, I really enjoyed this trial. The new characters were interesting, the old characters were mostly in-character, I can practically smell the deep plot, and above all it kept me entertained and wanting to play more. And seeing how closely I had to examine damn near every single individual frame, that's quite an accomplishment. It's also long.
However, there's one thing in particular that the both of you deserve high marks for, and that's just how astoundingly AA-like this case feels. Honestly, I'd go as far as to say that this is likely the closest a fan-made investigation has ever come to feeling like a genuine investigation from an AA game. While the Attorney's Badge didn't garner a response from everyone like it should have, at most times I would try presenting multiple things to people to see what they would say about it. Of course, I would think that for most things they wouldn't say much, but I was AMAZED to see that several characters actually had a lot to say about different pieces of evidence. On top of this, you can examine different areas. There was never a time where I went "WTF? Why can't I examine that?" because I was able to examine everything that I thought I should be able to. That's awesome to me.
Despite my numerous amount of complaints, the good easily outweighs the bad in the first part of Turnabout Crackdown. Enticing. Entertaining. There are so many investigations out there that find themselves so obsessed with innovation that they forget what the essence of an investigation is about, and that's investigating. This is the prime example of a great formulaic investigation.
Everyone has seen what you can do, ED, but Holhol--you're a fantastic trial authoress in the making. You can only get better from here. I can't wait for the next part.
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